Somedays I just close my eyes and I see,
A boy like joy on the face of my man,
All because he is walking towards me.
At long last, we are together again.
We have been so far away for so long,
There is so much that we both have been through.
Do you still miss me when you hear our song?
Do you still long to hold me close to you?
Night is getting cold, candle burning out,
Flame has started flickering from the breeze.
Send me your love and take away the doubt,
Before my fearful heart begins to freeze.
Write me a letter, tell me you are mine
I will wait, darling just send me a sign.
-N
Photographer unknown
Poetry © Copyright 2017, Opinionated Head
Inspiration– This piece was written for DARE TO WRITE Poetry Challenge on a face book page Poetry Planet, It’s my first attempt at a Shakespearean Sonnet.
Theme – Love Letter, Structure – 10 syllables/ abab,cdcd,efef,gg.
Results shall be out tomorrow (fingers crossed) 🙂
New development, results are out- Read here.
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September 10, 2017 at 8:29 pm
This attempt at a sonnet is beautiful – as far as I can see. No idea what to compare with……but beautiful all the same😊
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September 10, 2017 at 8:37 pm
Thank you, Vivian. 🙂
I have read and edited it so many times to fit it in the required structure that I can’t even tell what it sounds like.
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September 10, 2017 at 8:59 pm
Never tried one myself – well done!
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September 10, 2017 at 9:29 pm
🙂
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September 10, 2017 at 8:45 pm
I liked this. 🙂
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September 10, 2017 at 9:30 pm
Thanks Jim. 🙂
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September 10, 2017 at 9:01 pm
Never ever bad to step outside the comfort zone. Very well done. Meaningful from start to finish. Hopeful, vivid and captivating as well.
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September 10, 2017 at 9:29 pm
Muchas gracias, Gustavo! 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 12:41 am
Alright, she speaks Spanish now…I mean, I guess I’m okay with that. 😉
De nada, Miss Opinion. 🙂 Enjoying seeing more of your creative, and overall, mind and thoughts.
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September 11, 2017 at 10:20 am
Just elementary Spanish. It was my choice of foreign language during MBA. 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 6:16 pm
Alright well, in my completely unbiased opinion…I think it was a good choice 😉 haha
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September 11, 2017 at 6:37 pm
haha 🙂
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September 10, 2017 at 9:16 pm
Beautiful words, thought and emotions! Thanks for sharing.
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September 10, 2017 at 9:22 pm
Thanks for you kind words.
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September 10, 2017 at 11:53 pm
How did the result go. Irrespective, this is beautiful to read
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September 11, 2017 at 10:14 am
Thanks! 🙂 The results are due on the 12th i.e. tomorrow, let’s see.
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September 11, 2017 at 10:16 am
Good luck
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September 11, 2017 at 10:27 am
🙂
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September 12, 2017 at 3:27 pm
Hi Mr. Kurian
The results are out and I can’t believe I won!!! 🙂
you can read about it here – https://wordpress.com/post/opinionatedhead.com/10876
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September 12, 2017 at 4:00 pm
Oh my God, that’s wonderful. I am very happy 😊
In fact I am very proud of you
Congratulations 👍👌❤️🌹
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September 12, 2017 at 4:19 pm
Thank you!!! That’s really kind of you! 🙂 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 1:30 am
Very pretty. I am learning there are so many formula’s to writing. Wow!
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September 11, 2017 at 10:21 am
Thank you, I am also just starting to learn. 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 12:23 pm
When I am bored of my style which isn’t far off! I will start learning some formulas to try 🙂
Thanks!
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September 11, 2017 at 4:35 pm
haha good plan! 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 3:46 am
Such a sweet sonnet. Good luck. X
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September 11, 2017 at 10:22 am
Thank you!! 🙂 X
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September 11, 2017 at 6:12 am
really nice.i like it & best of luck 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 10:25 am
Thank you!! 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 6:16 am
Great, that is unconditional love. So inspiring.
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September 11, 2017 at 10:25 am
Thanks Philip. 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 8:55 am
I’m no expert on sonnets I’ll confess but…this worked very well indeed as a poem in its own right. So well done for that! Your words were moving and beautiful 🙂
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September 11, 2017 at 10:27 am
Thank you, I am glad you think so. 🙂
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September 12, 2017 at 3:53 pm
There’s absolutely no chance that you could’ve lost with a poem like this one. WOW.
This is so good, N. Loved it.
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September 12, 2017 at 4:19 pm
haha…Thank you Ket!!! That’s so sweet!
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September 15, 2017 at 9:01 pm
So lovely and heartfelt – Kudos!!!
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September 16, 2017 at 4:20 am
Thank you!! 🙂
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September 23, 2017 at 8:20 pm
Beautiful love letter to the man you love and long for.
It sings softly, with sure voice.
miriam
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September 24, 2017 at 7:40 am
Love it! Keep them coming….
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September 24, 2017 at 10:09 am
Thank you!! 🙂
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September 28, 2017 at 5:31 pm
Thanks for this Awesome publish.
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October 3, 2017 at 9:40 pm
wonderful letter! ❤
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October 3, 2017 at 10:53 pm
Thank you!! 🙂 🙂
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